The maps show plans of the college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now

Read the sample IELTS Writing Task 1 on the topic: The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Quick Links: 5.5 Band Sample Ver 1, 5.5 Band Sample Ver 2, 6.5 Band Sample

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The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band Score: 5.5 Bands

The diagram illustrates a café before renovation on the left side and café after renovation on the right side.

Overall, the café displays modernization with major changes such as converting staff dining room into takeaway and coffee bar section and outdoor seating area with a small barbecue section.

Before modernization, the western side of café were consist of a kitchen with a small room assigned to serve food and drink, while, after renovation, this small room is converted into a hot meal section. The central area of café was consist of tables and chairs with two small rooms reserved as staff dining rooms and a trash bin located to the east side nearer to the toilets. Whereas, after being renovated, the staff dining rooms have been converted into take-away and coffee bar sections. The salad bar is added to the western side of the central hall, and the trash bin is transformed into recycling bin to reused the material. However, the southern wall of the café is modified into outdoor seating area with a barbecue section.

Written by an IELTS Student

Band Score Analysis:

• Paraphrasing could be improved by not using the words [on the left side] [on the right side]. Here is the correct version: The diagram illustrates a café before and after the renovation.
• Overview needs improvement. The student should mention that things like coffee bar, outdoor seating area nd barbecue sections are newly added. So the words ‘added/constructed/built’ should be used. Also, using the word ‘modernization’ is not appropriate according to this task.
• The student should write ‘Before redesign or After redesign’, not ‘Before modernization’.
• There are subject-verb agreement mistakes. The mistakes: [cafe were*] [cafe was* consist]
• There are some missing articles. Correction: [into an* outdoor seating area]
• There are some word formation errors. The mistakes: [bin to reused* material, it should be ‘reuse’]
• We cannot use words like ‘western’ and ‘eastern’ etc, as there is no compass given on the map. We need to use vocabulary like ‘right next to, in front of, on the right/left side, etc.
• The student needs to use appropriate verb tense for both maps. Past tense only for ‘before redesign’ and present tense for ‘cafe today’.

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Band Score: 5.5 Bands

The map illustrates a college cafe and how it looks before and after reconstruction.

Overall, the cafe now have different types of food items, and more students can sit inside the cafe with the addition of outdoor seating.

Earlier to the redesigning project, toilets and bin are present on the right side of the cafe. The staff dining rooms were at the center of the cafe with table and chairs right next to it. If we talk about the kitchen, it was on the left side with a serving area in front.

But today, the cafe has outdoor seating with a barbecue section on the right. The toilets and bins remained unchanged but the staff dining rooms were converted into a takeaway food section and a coffee bar. Then the kitchen remained where it is before redesign while serving area turned into hot meals section. Finally, we can see a new salad bar on the left of the cafe as well.

Written by an IELTS Student

Band Score Analysis:

• The student paraphrased the question statement accurately, but using ‘reconstruction’ is not a good choice.
• The overview covers some of the important changes of the map, and it could be improved.
• There are many subject-verb agreement errors.
• The student has used informal language [if we talk about]
• There are some word formation errors.
• There are some punctuation mistakes as well.
• Some of the important changes are missing in the body paragraph [recycling bins].
• Inaccurate information [more students can sit inside the cafe].

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Band Score: 6.5 Bands

The maps illustrate the café of a college before and after it has been redesigned.

Overall, the café has been restructured to accommodate more students and offer a wide range of food choices. Moreover, the staff dining has been removed, and the café focuses more on recycling.

Before the redesign, the café had toilets on the right, which has been unchanged, and bins adjacent to it. Today, these bins have been replaced by recycling bins. Outside of the café, outdoor seating has been added to facilitate more students. On the left side of the café, near the entrance, a new barbecue section has been added as well.

In the center, the café had staff dining rooms with tables and chairs in front of it. Today, the table and chairs are still present; however, the staff dining rooms were removed and new coffee bar and take away food section have been built in its place right next to each other. Further, a salad bar is also built inside the café on the left side.

Finally, on the far side of the café, the kitchen is still present today, but serving has been replaced by a hot meals section.

Written by an IELTS Student

Band Score Analysis (6.5):

• The student has organised the information in a logical sequence, which improves cohesion and coherence.
• Paraphrasing is done properly.
• The student should have tried to rephrase the word ‘redesign’ by using different synonyms such as reshape, remodel, and modify or modifications.
• The overview is well written and covers all important changes in the map.
• Subject-verb agreement and punctuation mistakes are present.
• The score could be increased by including complex sentence structures and removing all the grammar mistakes.

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