Read the sample IELTS writing task 1 of type: tables. The question is about the population in New York City and its five districts from 1800 to 2000. Read the sample answers of the students with detailed feedback for each.
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Band Score: 5.5 Bands
The table illustrates the comparison of population between different districts of New York city.
Overall, there was a huge increase in population of other districts as compared to Manhattan district. Percentage of six different districts showed increase in population from three centuries.
In 1900, the total number of individuals consists of 3,437,202 people in New York city as compared to 1800 which comprises only 79,216 people. Then, there was a substantial increase in population consist of 8,009,185 people in the whole city in 2000.
In comparison, there were 60,515 people accounted for 76% of the population in Manhattan, while the other districts represent a small increase with 18,701 people constituting 24% of population. Then, in 1900, there was a slight increase in number of individuals constituting 1,850,093 people representing 54% of total population of the city. In contrast, the other districts showed 1,587,109 people accounting for 46% of total population. After this, there was huge increase in growth of population in other districts as compared to Manhattan district with 6,471,089 people constituting 81% of the population.
Written by an IELTS Candidate
Band Score Analysis:
- Introduction needs improvement; paraphrasing is not accurate.
- The overview does not summarize the main trends or important data effectively.
- Word formation mistakes
- Punctuation mistakes
- Use of linking word [in comparison] is wrong.
- It seems that the student has misunderstood the question.
Evaluated By: Hamza Ahmad
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