Read the line graph sample answer on the topic: The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Band Score: 5.0 Bands
The graph illustrates the data of members participated in different activities at social center in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the data showed that there was a fluctuation in the number of participants participating in different activities such as film clubs, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performance. Increase/decrease
Regarding film clubs, there were 65 participants in year 2000 and a slight decline in the number of participants was observed between 2005 and 2010, while a small increase in members was seen in 2020 [number missing]. Then, there were 37 total number of participants in 2000 followed by a fluctuation between 2005 to 2020. The amateur dramatics showed 25 competitors in 2000 and experienced considerable decline in number of participants from year 2005 to 2020. Between 2000 to 2005, there were only 17 players of table tennis followed a huge increase with 50 members from 2010 to 2020. Afterward, the participants in musical performance emerged in 2005 with a slight increase in number of participants till 2020.
Written by an IELTS Candidate
Band Score Analysis:
- The student has written a good introduction.
- The overview states that there were some fluctuations in the data, but it does not mention which category increased and which ones decreased.
- The body paragraph does not contain any data or figures for different categories.
- There are different punctuation mistakes.
- The student has not used any cohesive devices.
Band Score: 7.5 Bands
The line graph illustrates the participation figures for different activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia, over the period from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club maintained the highest participation throughout the period. While table tennis saw the most significant growth, amateur dramatics declined steadily. Meanwhile, martial arts remained relatively stable, and musical performances, despite starting with the lowest numbers, showed a notable growth over time.
From 2000 to 2020, the film club consistently had the highest participation, starting at around 65 members and experiencing a slight decline before recovering to nearly 70 by the end of the period. In contrast, amateur dramatics showed a steady downward trend, peaking at around 30 participants in 2005 before gradually dropping to fewer than 10 in 2020. Table tennis, which started with approximately 10 participants, saw the most significant rise, surpassing 40 by 2015 and reaching around 50 by 2020, making it the second most popular activity. Martial arts fluctuated between 30 and 40 participants, remaining relatively stable throughout. Meanwhile, musical performances had the lowest initial figures but showed consistent growth, climbing from nearly zero in 2000 to around 20 participants in 2020.
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Band Score Analysis:
- The response effectively addresses the task by summarizing key trends and making comparisons.
- The overview clearly highlights the most significant trends, which is essential for a high score.
- The body paragraph provides well-developed details and supports them with accurate data.
- The grammar is strong, with correct use of tenses (past simple for historical data and present perfect for general trends).
- Sentences are well-structured with a mix of simple, compound, and complex forms.
- A wide range of vocabulary is used effectively (notable growth, steadily declined, fluctuated, remained relatively stable).
- Precise numerical references strengthen the response.
- The response is logically structured, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraph.
- Linking words and phrases (e.g., in contrast, meanwhile, despite, in contrast, whereas) are used effectively.
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