Overpopulation of urban areas led to numerous problems.
What are the problems faced by urban people due to overpopulation? Suggest ways by which governments and individuals can tackle this problem.
Overcrowding in cities has raised various issues. People have to face unemployment and city
congestion due to this issue. To solve it, the government should improve the infrastructure, and
entrepreneurs should develop enough companies to overcome joblessness.
To begin with, clogging in urban areas has caused unemployment and city congestion that can
affect the lives of citizens. Due to this issue, people cannot even fulfill their basic necessities, as
they are jobless or earning a minimal amount of money each day which is not enough for the
bread and butter of the family. Furthermore, if the roads of the city are narrow and poorly
maintained, it will ultimately lead to traffic congestion every day. Because of this, people take
long hours to arrive at their destinations, even on their jobs, affecting their punctuality. For
example, one of my cousins has been late at her office almost for a month due to a road
blockage caused by broken roads. For this reason, she lost her job and is still struggling for a
new job to manage her household expenses in this fierce inflation.
To solve such an issue, the government should plan a restructuring of the infrastructure by
reconstructing it in a better way so that maximum transportation can be handled. Additionally,
they should increase the number of public transport and make separate routes for them to
avoid traffic obstruction. Secondly, young entrepreneurs should be encouraged to open up new
small-scale companies and hire people who are jobless. Thus, allowing people to earn money
and bear their daily expenses. For instance, recently government of Pakistan started giving
interest-free loans to young people to open handicraft businesses on a small scale which
improved the financial condition of the youngsters.
To conclude, overpopulation can create many major problems for the people living in urban
areas; however, with the involvement of the government and new businesspeople, it can be
solved.
Band Score Analysis: 7.0
1. Task Response: 7.0
✅ Strengths:
- Includes specific recommendations for both the government and individuals.
- Addresses both parts of the question (problems and solutions).
- Provides relevant examples (e.g., cousin’s job loss, Pakistan’s interest-free loans).
2. Cohesion & Coherence: 7.0
✅ Strengths:
- Uses linking words (To begin with, Furthermore, For instance, To conclude) effectively.
- Logical structure with clear separation of problems and solutions.
3. Lexical Resource (Vocabulary): 7.0
✅ Strengths:
- Uses topic-specific vocabulary (unemployment, infrastructure, congestion, entrepreneurs).
- Includes some good phrases (fierce inflation, daily expenses).
4. Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 6.5
✅ Strengths:
- Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures.
- Attempts passive voice and conditionals (if the roads of the city are narrow…).
Areas for Improvement:
- Include housing shortages, pollution, and healthcare strain to provide a more comprehensive response.
- Replace simple words like people, jobless, money with more precise academic vocabulary (citizens, unemployed, income).
- Avoid long, awkward sentences and use smoother transitions between ideas.
- Fix minor errors in articles, prepositions, and word order for a more polished response.
- Explain how businesses can effectively reduce unemployment beyond just small-scale companies hiring people.
