Tourism has become one of the leading sources of revenue in many countries.
Do the advantages of tourism outweigh the disadvantages?
Tourism has been a good way to earn income in many countries. The cultural preservation, employment opportunities, and high economic growth that result from tourism far outweigh any possible drawback.
The primary merit of tourism is that it saves the cultural values of a country. People from different countries visit other places every year; they purchase different artifacts of the country. This not only highlights the nation’s culture on a global level but also gives the native architects a chance to showcase their skills to the world. Hence, keeping the culture of a nation alive and well-preserved for future generations. Secondly, tourism is also a source of income. Local businesses hire seasonal workers to work in their hotels and tourist spots to host foreigners. Resultantly, giving a chance to local people to earn money. For example, in Pakistan, in the summer season when tourism is not its peak, hotels and restaurants open part-time job opportunities which boosts the local economy.
Another positive outcome of tourism is that it boosts the country’s economy. Today people are very interested in traveling and thus spend money buying different things during their stay at a certain tourist spot. Further, the revenue generated is then used by countries for infrastructure development. Hence, creating jobs and increasing economic growth. For example, recently Pakistan made tourist places tax-free, which increased the number of visitors, and the country generated money leading to an uplift in the country’s economy.
On the other hand, tourism has a number of drawbacks as well. The primary disadvantage is that the local government has to invest a massive amount of money in the maintenance of tourist spots. As a result, the authorities use the budget on tourism which could have been utilized in education, health, or other sectors. And thus, increasing the chances of a high illiteracy rate and widespread health issues. Another possible disadvantage is that frequently visited places become vulnerable to pollution of every kind, be it noise, air or water leads to various contagious diseases. For example, if too many buses and cars are used for transportation at tourist spots, the air gets filled up with smoke particles which are injurious to human lungs and cause cancer in some cases.
To conclude, tourism has proven to be a lucrative source of revenue for numerous nations, with its positive impacts such as cultural conservation, job creation, and substantial economic advancement outweigh any potential disadvantages.
Band Score Analysis: 6.5
Task Response (7.0):
✅ Strengths:
The essay effectively presents a clear stance and discusses both advantages and disadvantages. However, the disadvantages are not elaborated as much as the advantages, leading to slight imbalance.
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
✅ Strengths:
Ideas are logically connected, but some transitions feel abrupt. More linking words could enhance flow.
Lexical Resource: 6.5
✅ Strengths:
A range of vocabulary is used, but some word choices are repetitive (e.g., “tourism” appears too frequently).
Grammar and Accuracy: 6.5
✅ Strengths:
Some grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures affect readability (e.g., “when tourism is not its peak” should be “when tourism is at its peak”). Articles and prepositions are sometimes misused.
Areas for Improvement:
- Include housing shortages, pollution, and healthcare strain to provide a more comprehensive response.
- Replace simple words like people, jobless, money with more precise academic vocabulary (citizens, unemployed, income).
- Avoid long, awkward sentences and use smoother transitions between ideas.
- Fix minor errors in articles, prepositions, and word order for a more polished response.
- Explain how businesses can effectively reduce unemployment beyond just small-scale companies hiring people.
