Read a formal IELTS letter writing sample on the topic: You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
Band Score: 6 Bands
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing to express my interest in the position of live-in childcare assistant that I saw advertised in Australian magazine. I would be delighted to live with your family for six months and take care of your six years old child.
I have always enjoyed spending time with children and I believe this position would be an excellent opportunity for me to gain valuable experience while experiencing Australian family life. I am a patient, responsible and caring person and I understand the importance of creating a safe and positive environment for the young child. I am comfortable preparing simple meals, helping with homework and organizing entertaining activities.
I am also punctual and I would be happy to follow your family’s routines and expectations.
During my free time, I would like to explore Australia and learn about its culture and natural beauty. I would particularly enjoy visiting local attractions, going for walks and meeting new people. But my personal activities do not interfere with childcare responsibilities.
I look forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Kiran
Written by an IELTS Candidate
Band Score Analysis:
- The student has written a clear introductory sentence.
- There are different punctuation mistakes; there are missing articles and commas [in an*Australian magazine] [children, and I believe]
- While writing a letter, we must make separate paragraphs for each bullet point.
- Student need to improve their topic sentences.
- The student should include compound and complex sentences.
- The student has to organise the information in a more cohesive way using different cohesive devices.
Learn how to write letters in the IELTS writing test.
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